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Inkheart
Level: 290
i love your poem it’s sincere and beautifulkao_sparkle.png, i can feel the feelings you pour as I read it . I used to write and read a poem (I’m busy with my classes that I don’t have much time for it) for me poetry and poems is a beautiful ways to express you feelings and emotions and also a beautiful ways to feel and understand others feelings ,through poems i can feel something that I used to not know before .kao_yoroshiku.png thank you for sharing your work and stories , it reminds me of the old days. Some people might think poetry was nothing and just short lines of words but this nothings actually makes my heart beat a sound I’ve never heard before . Keep on writing and if it’s possible I would be happy if you willing to share some with mekao_sorry.png

Aww, thank you so much for your kind words kao_heart.png I find myself often thinking poetically, so writing poetry has always felt very natural. I'm so glad that other people can enjoy and resonate with my poems kao_sorry.png I have lots of mismatched lines and verses that I hope to expand into completed poems soon, and I'll be sure to share them if I do (^^)

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10 days ago
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Aphasia6215
Level: 81

I'm a fan of poetry! The poems here are great. I do write my own poems periodically, but its super dependant on my mood. Mine are always super sad and abstract which makes me very hesitant to share them usually. Here's one of my newer ones. I apologize if its too dramatic

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San Bluciel

When the clock ticks
It speaks of dreams of meaning beyond
Purple sparkles algebraic shadows


Each second lies upon unmarked time
Gloating on self on control on nine
The hole grows ever spiraling inside

A rotten carrot hung above the starving
Interactions of inane conscious conniving
Waves of deep blue signs wasted shining

Kept quiet are the crimes unseen
Damned to be the intemperie
Maddening for the unbelieved
Help for the Silent Aquamarine

Content to be alive are the night skies
Heavy be the four fold fractals collide
Solitude are the clouds of worlds that abide
Mind melding drawls of the inward mind

To look aside is to die


Bluciel A Fool (Extra piece I wrote a day later)

Along the unawoken
Scrawling in the flowers
Avoidant of the bright sky
Consternation of dreams unkind
Dreadful of the officious inside

It all lies in a bubble
Flickering in jamais vu
Watching on the other side

A deep blue
It knows of me too

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7 days ago
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daAAmN boi you got the right stuff! The words you used in the whole poem got me bewildered kao_shiawase.png
Poems are always dramatic 😤😤
It's a little hard for me to understand but how in the world did you use those words "purple sparkles algebraic shadows"!? wow kao_sparkle.png you should be a poet too!

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7 days ago
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@Aphasia6215 I like it :)

It's very freeform and abstract, but packs a lot of meaning. Had to look up few words (e.g. "intemperie"). At first I though the title was French, but that's not the case. I assume it still means "Saint Blue Sky"? Likely "Bluciel" being a name as opposed to the literal "blue sky"?

Here's my rudimentary understanding: Searching for meaning within the abstract/uncertain flow of time (stanza 1-2) → A sense of growing desperation (stanza 2) → Human Illusion/delusion (stanza 3) → Hidden suffering or Moral neglect? (stanza 4) → The last stanza gives me vibes of "solitude" and "introspective", but I can't explain it well. → Final line feels like a warning of the consequences of ignorance. More of like a spiritual "death".

Hopefully that's at least somewhat close to what you had in mind.


"A rotten carrot hung above the starving" is such a nice line. A "carrot on a stick", but the "reward" is rotten, and "hung above" adds a sense of control and/or manipulation.


There's also this really nice cool, melancholic colour palette in the background. "Blu", "blue", "purple", "deep blue" and "Aquamarine".


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7 days ago
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Aphasia6215
Level: 81

Behind the glass

Locked eyes I knew

A spectating Deluge

It saw me right through



Cold liquid Azure

It takes my hand

The rest of me too



Great Cerulean

I sing to you

One day soon



O' my Deep Blue

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